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This will take place at crystal springs trail on a bench overlooking the spring. Near sunset, since sun sets over the springs
General ideas continued from where left off-
Then middle age couple walks by in the background from right side. The boy doesn’t notice, but they talk about how they always love coming back to this trail and how peaceful it is.
Boy is looking out at the spring as they are walking by and finish
Then old couple walks by from left side and they sit down next to the boy on the bench. Boy takes off his headphones and says sure you can sit here.
Old couple are talking and they are audible and they are talking about how much they enjoy each other, boy puts his head back down in his hands still in distress. Old people respond. Old man tells him some words of wisdom about relationships (not too cliché) maybe some humor about himself and his wife. Old lady says time for us to go, so they both get up, old man tells boy it will be “alright kid pull through”.
After they leave out of the WS. All isolated sounds. Boy relaxes back in his park bench and looks at the spring again (hears small sound of waves). Boy looks at Grass and hears the sound of crickets, and soft wind sound as wind is blowing nearby grass. (if theres no wind it will have to be man made and sound effect can be put in later). Boy looks at free way in back of him and notices sound of cars passing by. Boy looks out at the spring once again and now all sounds are audible. Boy pulls phone out of his pocket with right hand. Looks at it (seems like he is contemplating something) then puts phone down, face down, on his right leg and slouches further back in bench. ONLY THING AUDIBLE Phone starts ringing (ringtone differences genuwine). Boy turns his phone back over and looks at the front and caller ID says Katy and picture is of boy and Katy smiling (happy). Boy looks at it then looks out at spring and left to right (now all previous sounds in green are heard) then he looks back at phone (only ringtone is heard) boy sighs and pushes silent on his phone. (WS from beginning) Gets up and walks out of frame. Time lapse until night time then fade out.
WS- the sun will outline the boy in black and the area around him is in light.
Boy walking (head down) sits down on park bench.
FROM HERE ON 180 line shouldn’t be crossed until final scene. CU
Boy sitting down (sighing)
CU different side
Boy putting face in his hands (distressed)
WS in front of boy
Young couple walks by in background, they come from the left side (can hear them talking how much they like each other)
Dollying of couple walking
Continue how much they like ea other
WS
Boy turning as couple walks away so he only sees their backs (they don’t see him)
CU
Boy shaking his head, pulls out ipod
CU of one side of his ear
puts his head up plugs in his head phones (we can hear his music- sad heartbroken stuff)
This will take place at crystal springs trail on a bench overlooking the spring. Near sunset, since sun sets over the springs
General ideas continued from where left off-
Then middle age couple walks by in the background from right side. The boy doesn’t notice, but they talk about how they always love coming back to this trail and how peaceful it is.
Boy is looking out at the spring as they are walking by and finish
Then old couple walks by from left side and they sit down next to the boy on the bench. Boy takes off his headphones and says sure you can sit here.
Old couple are talking and they are audible and they are talking about how much they enjoy each other, boy puts his head back down in his hands still in distress. Old people respond. Old man tells him some words of wisdom about relationships (not too cliché) maybe some humor about himself and his wife. Old lady says time for us to go, so they both get up, old man tells boy it will be “alright kid pull through”.
After they leave out of the WS. All isolated sounds. Boy relaxes back in his park bench and looks at the spring again (hears small sound of waves). Boy looks at Grass and hears the sound of crickets, and soft wind sound as wind is blowing nearby grass. (if theres no wind it will have to be man made and sound effect can be put in later). Boy looks at free way in back of him and notices sound of cars passing by. Boy looks out at the spring once again and now all sounds are audible. Boy pulls phone out of his pocket with right hand. Looks at it (seems like he is contemplating something) then puts phone down, face down, on his right leg and slouches further back in bench. ONLY THING AUDIBLE Phone starts ringing (ringtone differences genuwine). Boy turns his phone back over and looks at the front and caller ID says Katy and picture is of boy and Katy smiling (happy). Boy looks at it then looks out at spring and left to right (now all previous sounds in green are heard) then he looks back at phone (only ringtone is heard) boy sighs and pushes silent on his phone. (WS from beginning) Gets up and walks out of frame. Time lapse until night time then fade out.
WS- the sun will outline the boy in black and the area around him is in light.
Boy walking (head down) sits down on park bench.
FROM HERE ON 180 line shouldn’t be crossed until final scene. CU
Boy sitting down (sighing)
CU different side
Boy putting face in his hands (distressed)
WS in front of boy
Young couple walks by in background, they come from the left side (can hear them talking how much they like each other)
Dollying of couple walking
Continue how much they like ea other
WS
Boy turning as couple walks away so he only sees their backs (they don’t see him)
CU
Boy shaking his head, pulls out ipod
CU of one side of his ear
puts his head up plugs in his head phones (we can hear his music- sad heartbroken stuff)
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So, I’m kind of confused. There’s a boy and he’s at the park all lonely and sad. Then an elderly couple come over to spread some wisdom. How would sound help the story move forward though? What’s the intent? I was visually thinking that while the boy was taking in around his surroundings, you could put in some folley sounds of someone(like a girl) that he’s thinking of. Like when he’s noticing the waves of the lake, have a girls laugh blend in or something. I feel like there should be a turning point with the boy somehow.
ReplyDeleteThe intent of this scene is to definitely portray a boy's relationship with his environment and explore perhaps why he even has a relationship with his environment.
ReplyDeleteThis scene has relatively little to no plot points, which should be acknowledged. Perhaps the first plot point is the introduction to the environment from a third person point of view, then move into the point of view of the boy. That way you can see two interpretations of the same environment. The second plot point should be that the conflict should be introduced by way of portraying why the character is so attached to his environment.
The climax should be a defining memory that the boy has and finally reveals clearly why he retreats to nature.
The resolution should occur shortly after the climax because he should be leaving the location after he is done thinking.
The scene should end with the boy leaving his sanctuary back into a world of suffering and showing the inevitability of the situation.
Very little should be said in the movie and most of the narrative should come from sights and sound.
The story is pushed forward by the character's recollection of memories steadily intensifying.